More & more i flow to the weather

19 years ago

More & more I flow to the weather.

It commands me.

Heavy lows I lie reading and restless. I transplant.

Sometimes I shape.

Sparkling highs I skip trailing love-lies-bleeding holding aloft the platycodon, figuratively.

Springing with Spring I grow manic like these damn dandlions. Spreading my seeds (oops. sorry, I only have eggs)

Then trip with the rain, fine rain,

don't have to turn on the sprinkler this week rain.

In the releasee of rain you can ask of me anything.

My sons get money, I cook for friends.

Then summer ~ oh, how can others live in that silk flower world when each leaf is dancing, while the branches sway to the beat of the trunk to the fingers of roots nestled snug into our earth is dancing.

Sweat rolling off my nose and into the carrots. Time for fences and roofs and a half day respite. But then, as harvest begins, the taste of winter to come sweetens the ripe and I remember the eternal cycle.

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Comments (6)

eddie_ga_7a
19 years ago
The line I like best is:
"oh how can others live in that silk flower world when each leaf is dancing"
live_oak_lady
19 years ago
Perfect analogy. I like the line "Heavy lows I lie reading and restless". "Silk flower world" is excellent also.

Coleen
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clfo
19 years ago
For me, the lines that resonate most are:
"In the release of rain you can ask of me anything.
My sons get money, I cook for friends."

This is pure poetry Â using a few words and images to express volumes.
thanks, C.L.
ginger_nh
19 years ago
Very nice - seeing into your world and drawing parallels
G.
laa_laa
19 years ago
I keep coming back to this thread to read your poetry again and again. It has such a fluidity... I really enjoy reading this. Do you have more? Lina.
jenizone5
Original Author
19 years ago
Thank you for your kind replies. The poem is a rough draft, but I thought I had a nice start and I wondered if I was saying anything worth saying so I posted it. I used to write as a young woman, but haven't recently. I was reading Whitmans' "Leaves of Grass" and got inspired.
One of the changes I would make is to change "trailing love-lies-bleeding" to "trailing dicentra", because I used the scientific name for balloon flower and I think it should parallel.
(Yes I know dicentra is bleeding hearts...but I can't pronounce amaranthus)