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| More & more I flow to the weather.
It commands me. Heavy lows I lie reading and restless. I transplant. Sometimes I shape. Sparkling highs I skip trailing love-lies-bleeding holding aloft the platycodon, figuratively. Springing with Spring I grow manic like these damn dandlions. Spreading my seeds (oops. sorry, I only have eggs)
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- Posted by Eddie_GA_7A (My Page) on Thu, May 27, 04 at 8:53
| The line I like best is: "oh how can others live in that silk flower world when each leaf is dancing" |
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- Posted by live_oak_lady Zone 9 (My Page) on Thu, May 27, 04 at 18:06
| Perfect analogy. I like the line "Heavy lows I lie reading and restless". "Silk flower world" is excellent also. Coleen |
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| For me, the lines that resonate most are: "In the release of rain you can ask of me anything. My sons get money, I cook for friends." This is pure poetry – using a few words and images to express volumes. |
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| Very nice - seeing into your world and drawing parallels G. |
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| I keep coming back to this thread to read your poetry again and again. It has such a fluidity... I really enjoy reading this. Do you have more? Lina. |
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| Thank you for your kind replies. The poem is a rough draft, but I thought I had a nice start and I wondered if I was saying anything worth saying so I posted it. I used to write as a young woman, but haven't recently. I was reading Whitmans' "Leaves of Grass" and got inspired. One of the changes I would make is to change "trailing love-lies-bleeding" to "trailing dicentra", because I used the scientific name for balloon flower and I think it should parallel. (Yes I know dicentra is bleeding hearts...but I can't pronounce amaranthus) |
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